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Fic: Passing Notes , 1/4

Title: Passing Notes, in four parts
Author: Sare Liz
Series: Firebolt Ring
Pairing: HG/VK
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Warning: Rated PG-13 for some double entendre and flutterings in the stomach. It’s strangely contiguous with both GoF book and movie (does this count for the heresy of syncretism?). And yet, this is possibly OOC for Viktor. Not that we have a heck of a lot to go on, but I’m betting there’s more than one story behind his glowering façade.

Notes: So, this is my first sojourn in this fandom. I’m so very excited. And I have no beta, yet. Perhaps this will become very clear to you as you read on. If anyone is willing to take on that heinous task, let me know.


*

Languages were horrible things. This was especially true if you were nervous and trying to start a conversation with a pretty girl. Conversations that didn’t occur in Bulgarian were particularly bad. Even in Bulgarian, though, it would be very difficult. That is why, in Viktor’s opinion, languages were horrible things. And spoken language was the worst.

This is why, after three days of lurking, he decided a new strategy. There was more than one way to catch the snitch, after all.

Meet me by Muggle Studies?

The scrap of parchment floated down onto her book as he passed by her table, ostensibly going into the stacks to look for something. He’d tested this out before. If he didn’t linger too long, the ones who trailed him didn’t get too bold.

She found him crouched down in the nook, next to but not on the squashy chair that occupied most of the space between the bookshelves. He was fingering a likely looking book. He’d never heard of the author, but the title looked promising. Pride and Prejudice.

“Um, hi,” she whispered tentatively, looking uncertain.

He smiled in response. She came. She actually came. His heart nearly skipped a beat.

Viktor indicated the chair he was next to and whispered, “Vill you sit?”

Her blush was cute, and rather encouraging. When she sat, he came out of his crouch and kneeled down, sitting back on his heels.

“Ve don’t haff much time,” he whispered, to start.

Her expression asked her question, and he nodded in the direction they’d both come. “The other girls,” he whispered. “They are a little crazy. They vill come to find me, if I take too long. I do not vant that.”

“What do you want?” she asked.

“Quiet?” he asked softly, a bit of a wistful look on his face.

“Good luck,” she responded, smirking.

“Not so hard, sometimes, but harder here, in the Library. They alvays find me before I get here.”

“Where don’t they find you?” she inquired, seeming to be genuinely interested.

“The ship. The quidditch pitch. The forest. Sometimes before lunch, or dinner they are not around, and never in the effening.” It had only taken the moonstruck girls two days to learn his schedule. He’d lost the bet. Viktor didn’t think it could happen in under two weeks – oh, how wrong he’d been.

“Oh,” she said. The quiet that followed was filled with Viktor Marshalling His Nerve.

“Does not alvays mean being alone, this Quiet I hope for.”

“Oh?”

“No. I… Vould you go flying vith me?” God, he was desperate to impress her. He had no idea why. And flying? It really was his ace card, and maybe his only card. Was it the right place to start? …But her face was draining of color. This was not good, not good at all.

“I, um. I don’t fly. Er, that is, I don’t fly well…”

“Oh,” he said, looking around, stunned. Shit. Shit, shit, shit, shit, shit. “I…”

“Yes,” she said suddenly, definitively, and rather loudly. “When?”

Viktor was a little disoriented, but got his bearings quickly enough. His grin was threatening to take over his entire face. “Tomorrow? In effening? Ve fly tandem, you need no skill. Is okay.”

She was smiling shyly now. “Alright. Where?”

“Em…” He was trying to think of a place that wouldn’t invite instant scrutiny. “Between stone cabin and forest? Do you know the place I intend?”

“Behind Hagrid’s hut? Yes, by the pumpkins.”

“Yes, there. At eight? Can you come at eight?”

She nodded, and a strand of her hair came loose from where she’d secured it at the back of her head, sliding forward only to have her tuck it behind an ear. “I have to be back in the castle by nine to make curfew.”

It felt like he was already flying.


*

Tomorrow had very quickly become today, and today’s tomorrow was the day, the day they would find out who the champions were to be. If he won tomorrow, it would mean that much more leverage with Karkaroff. If he won today, he’d need all the leverage he could get.

She was muggleborn. He hadn’t known, not that it made such a big difference, at least, not to him. Karkaroff was a different matter, though. The white-haired boy, Malfoy, had told him gleefully all the inflammatory things that could be said about her and the group she ran with. There was something familiar about that quartet – Malfoy, Hermione, and her two friends, but he couldn’t place it. There was no reason they should be familiar, anyway. It was probably just his imagination.

Malfoy wasn’t his imagination, however. He was, in fact, a giant pain in the ass, and about as moonstruck as the cows that followed him around when he went running. How he wished the entire contingent hadn’t been assigned to the Slytherin table. Life would be so much more interesting if he were allowed to sit with the Gryffindors. He might not have to pass notes in the library.

He’d researched the rightness of the colloquial phrase, and had toyed with the idea of simply bending over her in the library and whispering in her ear, but wondered if it might not get him kicked out by the librarian. He settled on writing it, instead.

Are we still on for tonight?

He stalked passed her as the parchment fluttered down and wandered over to the comfortable chair, this time sinking down into it. It really was nice back here. If only it afforded a decent view of Hermione studying, it might be perfect. He crossed his legs and soon was lost in thought about exactly what he should bring for their evening, and what he might say. He’d never gone out on a date before – he’d escorted girls to balls, sure, but nothing beyond what was strictly required of him.

“You look comfortable.”

Her soft voice full of irony jarred him from his musings. When he looked up, he couldn’t quite tell what the expression on her face meant as she was only half looking at him, half perusing books on the shelf.

“I saw you, today. Putting your name in the goblet, I mean.”

Viktor cracked his neck and uncrossed his legs, stretching them out in front of the chair.

“I saw you, too.”

“I know.” She looked down at the floor in front of her shoes, and he thought that perhaps she was beginning to blush again. “I mean, I think a lot of people noticed that. It was very, um, deliberate, your stare. It was like you already knew where I was in the room, and like you were trying to tell me something.”

“Is true. From moment I valk into hall, I know you are there. And I do say something vith my eyes,” Viktor paused, and cocked his head to the side. “But maybe I say in Bulgarian, and you do not understand?”

She giggled and ducked her head again, but Viktor found that he quite liked it when she giggled. It was a far different creature from the giggling of the cows.

“Can you not guess?”

She looked back up, bit her lip, and shook her head.

“I do not know the correct words in English, but I vill try to explain. I look at you vhen I apply to become a champion, because of old days. In old days… in old days, a champion did not get honor for himself, or even for prince alone. There vas… another.”

As he spoke, she looked up, and her eyes had gone a bit wide.

“You understand now?”

“I think so.”

Just then they heard the stage whisper squeal of a discontented groupie. The pack was on the move.

Viktor sprang from the chair, but before he passed her at the shelves, he stopped. Hands lightly on her shoulders, and standing just behind her, he bent his head slightly and whispered in her ear. “Vear varm clothes, okay?”

And then he was off.

*


Tags: firebolt ring, hg/vk, romance

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[info]mellowdee

December 5 2005, 01:13:31 UTC 6 years ago

WTF. SUPER CUTE. I'm so excited for the next 3 parts. What is it with all you fabulous writers and cutting stories into parts!

I love your Viktor dialogue! It's quite nice with the choppy bits. Very nice read.

Will add to the memories of [info]viktorhermione!

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 01:20:13 UTC 6 years ago

::smiles in a dopey, sickly way:: I'm glad you like it. I can't speak for any of the other writers but I cut into parts because I'm not done with it yet. I'm fairly certian there are going to be three other parts, and not say, seven or two. Part two is already extant, but might get changed before part three is done. So it goes.

I'm falling right in love with Viktor, and I never expected that. It's sort of exciting.

[info]bunney

December 5 2005, 01:20:40 UTC 6 years ago

I remember you from Buffy fandom, right? Your name is really familiar to me. Welcome!

This is wonderful, though. You've written Viktor as quite endearing and sweet...how could Hermione not love him to bits?

And I don't know why you think you need a beta...it was darn near perfect!

[info]bunney

December 5 2005, 01:23:30 UTC 6 years ago

By the way, mind if I friend you? Gotta keep an eye on this story and anything else you might decide to write for us!

[info]sare_liz

6 years ago

[info]bunney

6 years ago

[info]sare_liz

6 years ago

[info]dancinggoldfish

December 5 2005, 01:37:40 UTC 6 years ago

This is absolutely lovely - I can't wait to see where it goes next, and I'm very impressed with your writing. Do you mind if I friend you? :D

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:07:56 UTC 6 years ago

I'm glad you liked it. Personally, I can't wait to see where it goes next either. Should be exciting. Glad you like the writing as well. And, friend away. I've friended you.

[info]supergirl69187

December 5 2005, 02:10:35 UTC 6 years ago

awww so cute!!! i cant wait for more! this looks like its going to be good!

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:08:57 UTC 6 years ago

There are many comments of cuteness. I have to say, 'cute' was not my original goal. I need to revisit this Viktor and have an indepth conversation as to his motivation. Or perhaps I'll send Karkaroff. That would be interesting to overhear...

[info]_odella_

December 5 2005, 02:32:18 UTC 6 years ago

here via [info]bunney, oooh, I like this! I've had a craving for more Viktor/Hermione fic, and this is looking wonderful, looking forward to seeing more!
I've friended you by the way, hope you don't mind :)

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:12:14 UTC 6 years ago

The joys of being pimped out. It's really quite exciting. Yay.

I too have had a major craving for V/H fic, and there are next to no archives that update on anything like a regular basis. And yet... there are these lovely lj communities. Who knew? Certianly not me. So, I've learned a new way to communicate and gotten a more or less easy way to archive my own stuff. It's kinda cool. Love the feedback, too.

You friend me, I friend you. It's a lovely networking device.

[info]ladysaille

December 5 2005, 02:43:55 UTC 6 years ago

Viktor?

Oh I love this. I love the way you've written him. He does seem very sweet the way you've written him, but I imagine he's like most people and that is only part of his nature. Can't wait to see what your next parts will be like. Bravo

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:14:05 UTC 6 years ago

Re: Viktor?

Cute. Sweet. I really do need to reread what I've written. Perhaps it's not what has been in my head all this time. Hm. I am happy that it's generally been well accepted, tho. That's good.

::grin:: The next part is from Hermione's perspective. It's going to be... different. Maybe. Hard to tell.

[info]ladysaille

6 years ago

[info]sare_liz

6 years ago

[info]ladysaille

6 years ago

[info]heartof_destiny

December 5 2005, 02:52:43 UTC 6 years ago

Ah! So cute! I'd really love to read the next parts as soon as you can get them down ;)

And yeah, how Viktor stared at Hermione? It was like he was psychic! =)

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:16:31 UTC 6 years ago

I'm glad you liked the fic.

...all this cuteness and light. I think maybe I've just mellowed out, or something. Perhaps I'm no longer capable of anything approaching angst. Maybe I should try, just to see...

::nods:: I've been wondering what all the staring was about, and how really, it started within the first week that he was there, according to the movie, which according to the book, was the halloween feast (i think - i'm rereading all the books after my NEWTs in january). Makes a shippy person like me wonder just when this relationship of their took off.

[info]yeats

December 5 2005, 03:00:09 UTC 6 years ago

Oh, this is wonderful - found you on the v/hr community. I can't want to read more!

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:17:24 UTC 6 years ago

Thanks! I'm glad you're liking the story. This is good.

[info]dreamsinvisible

December 5 2005, 03:01:08 UTC 6 years ago

Here by [info]bunney's rec.

I love this story so far and can't wait to read more. Most people really have a hard time writing Viktor and I think you're doing an amazing job. Hope you don't mind that I've friended you. Welcome to LJ!

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:20:52 UTC 6 years ago

Hey, thanks. Strangely enough, Viktor has come very easily and very quickly to me. Most of my characters don't. I'm just wondering how interesting it will be if I stick with him for any length of time - how my understanding of him will deepen and morph, and how I'll have him grow as we all do.

You friend me, and I friend you. Thanks!

[info]our_innocence

December 5 2005, 03:28:32 UTC 6 years ago

“What do you want?” she asked.

“Quiet?” he asked softly, a bit of a wistful look on his face.

“Good luck,” she responded, smirking.


HAHA. :: death by giggles ::

Perfect. Viktor's not OOC at all. I loves it! More, more!

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:38:52 UTC 6 years ago

::grins:: I have to admit that I liked that bit. It just goes to show that whatever Viktor rehearses and *thinks* he might talk about with Hermione, what is actually said has only a vague resemblance. My favorite line, though, was this one:

“Is true. From moment I valk into hall, I know you are there. And I do say something vith my eyes,” Viktor paused, and cocked his head to the side. “But maybe I say in Bulgarian, and you do not understand?”

As to the OOC, I think of it like this. The character we have of Viktor is from the perspective of Harry. Harry notices that he's slump shouldered and duck footed, Harry emphasizes that he's as graceful as a bird in the air, and the opposite on the ground, and it's through Harry's eyes that we see Viktor being grumpy everywhere. Now, as I see it, there is more than a grain of truth in Harry's perspective, but I think that the concept of a moody hero really appeals to Our Boy Harry, as he is one himself, whether or not he self-designates as such. Having been quite a moody person myself in my teens, I know that there's more to it than just being grumpy. We're all complex - incredibly so, and I do have so much fun teasing out some of those complexities in my attempt to understand odd phenomena like that stare Viktor gave Hermione when he put his name in the goblet on what... his fourth day at Hogwarts?

So... I guess when you have a character with so much of his information left fuzzy or incomplete, it's hard to pin something on him and say IC, or totally OOC. Really, I just didn't want flames.

But all that to say I'm really glad you're liking the fic.

[info]vafizziks

December 5 2005, 03:42:18 UTC 6 years ago

I don't think Viktor's OOC. After all, he looked like he was having fun at the Yule Ball in the movie. Excellent start. Can't wait for the rest.

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:40:45 UTC 6 years ago

Thanks.

And, what is the story behind your icon? I've seen it for weeks and have been wondering...

[info]vafizziks

6 years ago

[info]dora_mcallister

December 5 2005, 03:55:11 UTC 6 years ago

so good. i really like this beginning and i don't usually go for couples like this or this couple in particular. well done, i want more.

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:41:33 UTC 6 years ago

Hm. I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. I hope it continues for you. What part of 'couples like this' is it that you usually don't go for?

[info]staciey

December 5 2005, 04:54:29 UTC 6 years ago

Very nice beginning. As no one else has mentioned it, I'll mention that I particularly liked your explanation for Viktor's Intense Stare of Lurrrrve, as I've dubbed it. ;-) Seriously, I like him trying to get across the idea that he's rather being "the lady's champion", in the chivalry/knights-type sense, so to speak.

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:50:35 UTC 6 years ago

Thanks. It struck me in all of Viktor's stares that they were exceedingly deliberate. I think to myself, "That boy is trying to say something very, very specific. I wonder if she realizes it?"

One of the things that I'm beginning to tease out in this fic, though it may not end up in the story, is the sense that Hermoine and Viktor really are in different places in their lives. Viktor's already got a career, and in my little universe, this last year in school is a formality that he is observing because he feels he must. Viktor isn't a partyboy and he's not ready to be an international playboy when he graduates. He's ready to settle down. Hermione is not. Viktor, partially because of his age, partially because of his stage in life, is going to be ready to get very intense, very quickly. Hermione... Hermione is getting ready to fight a war, whether or not it is a conscious thing for her. She's picking out armor, he's picking out china patterns. Bit of a twist, that. So saying, the 'lady's champion' is an unexpected reversal.

So, they're both exceedingly mature for their ages, but in different ways, and with different goals in mind. Now, I don't see this as inherently a bad thing, but it will make for interesting fic. Viktor is entranced and half wondering if she's willing to learn some Bulgarian to please his mother. Hermione is half entranced and wondering if he's willing to pass information for the Order (so to speak). Or, at least they will be at some point in the near future. I think. Maybe.

I'm just going to shut up now.

[info]staciey

6 years ago

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6 years ago

[info]staciey

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[info]victoriana

December 5 2005, 05:00:01 UTC 6 years ago

Totally cute! I can't wait to see further parts.

And if you're seeking a beta, I'd be glad to volunteer. I'm a grad student in English and I work in the writing lab, so making suggestions and checking grammar and the like is something I'm accustomed to.

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 19:55:41 UTC 6 years ago

Thanks, and cool. Let's talk about the beta thing.

I've friended you, btw.

[info]victoriana

6 years ago

[info]winter_dragona

December 5 2005, 05:01:54 UTC 6 years ago

It's weird. This story has so many features that I generally dislike - people talking with accents, characters that don't mesh with how I've imagined them (a giggling Hermione, an uncertain Victor), etc.

And yet, I liked it. The accent didn't get in the way of understanding the dialogue, and on second thought, I think you're right - Hermione wouldn't have gone for an arrogant guy anyway. Well done.

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 20:03:06 UTC 6 years ago

Hm. Thanks. Generally, I too dislike accents written as such, but there are exceptions to that rule for me. A good Viktor is one of them, I think. And as for characters doing unseemly things, if in the end I approve of where they come out, it becomes a lot more palatable for me.

And about a giggling Hermione - I don't think that Harry sees her as giggly, so we don't, and I think that in general Hermione herself doesn't have a self image of Giggly, but I think that she does in fact become giggly given the right impetus. And I think a cute boy flirting with her in private and making cute self-depreciating jokes would totally make her giggly, possibly despite herself. I think too, it depends on whether or not she feels on the defensive, but the library is her home turf, and each encounter, she had more 'power' than he did - each time she had chosen to accompany him, and was in a physically higher and more mobile position. He literally put himself at multiple disadvantages in order to make the situation better for her. (Multiple, if you count english over bulgarian.)

And my Viktor is a syncretist's version of book and movie. We'll see where he comes out, in the end.

Anonymous

December 5 2005, 06:10:59 UTC 6 years ago

this was fantastic. This is exactly how I imagine Viktor to be. Beautiful.

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 20:04:35 UTC 6 years ago

Thanks.

[info]beauty_is_self

December 5 2005, 06:58:52 UTC 6 years ago

ok, I think I'm one of the only people who hasn't yet seen GoF, but I totally love it simply because it has brought forth all of this wonderful Viktor/Hermione fic... and it makes me happy.

VERY cute so far. Love that it's from his POV. His perception of her makes me all warm and fuzzy inside. The last part, about him putting his name in, and her watching... made me melt...

I hope you don't mind friends, I cannot resist!! (and I can't wait for more!! YAY!!)

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 20:06:57 UTC 6 years ago

I'm glad you liked the fic. It won't all be from his pov, but half will. ...Yea, that part made me melt, too. Just wait till you see the movie - it's quite the stare he gives her, and it seems to come from no where.

We're mutual friends now. ::grin::

[info]pumahmistress

December 5 2005, 09:06:01 UTC 6 years ago

I loved it :D Can't wait for the next part <3

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 20:07:35 UTC 6 years ago

I'm glad you liked it. As soon as I finish part three, I'll post part two.

[info]scifichick774

December 5 2005, 18:40:26 UTC 6 years ago

*happy sigh* I'm so glad so many authors have picked up writing my book OTP. This one is lovely so far. :)

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 20:08:19 UTC 6 years ago

Glad you liked the fic. Remind me, what's OTP again?

[info]sare_liz

6 years ago

[info]dreamsingr17

December 5 2005, 21:36:25 UTC 6 years ago

Way cute! I love it!

[info]sare_liz

December 5 2005, 22:28:23 UTC 6 years ago

Thanks. I'm glad you're enjoying it.

[info]jewel_song

December 6 2005, 00:00:52 UTC 6 years ago

Oooooh, that was CUTE. I'm really, really look forward to more!

“I do not know the correct words in English, but I vill try to explain. I look at you vhen I apply to become a champion, because of old days. In old days… in old days, a champion did not get honor for himself, or even for prince alone. There vas… another.”

As he spoke, she looked up, and her eyes had gone a bit wide.

“You understand now?”

“I think so.”


Oh man, I loved that part like whoa. Anyway, again, this was awesome and I look forward to the next chapter! Huzzah!

♥♥♥

P.S. Viktor didn't seem OOC to me at all! :3

[info]sare_liz

December 6 2005, 02:19:40 UTC 6 years ago

::grins:: I liked that bit too. It's my impression that as much as Viktor thinks he can't speak English well, he's actually got an excellent grasp on the language, and for the most part he just keeps his concepts simple, and is thus able to explain quite a bit. If anything goes wrong, it's more vocabulary than grammar, except when he's feeling emotional. Then the grammar goes. When he's really excited or really flustered, his indirect object pronouns are right out the door.

Anyway. Glad you liked it.

[info]lillithowl

December 6 2005, 02:35:33 UTC 6 years ago

Hi I was directed here by another LJ entry. It was a very sweet beginning and I'm looking forward to reading more.

Well done!!

[info]sare_liz

December 6 2005, 21:28:42 UTC 6 years ago

Thanks very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the first part, and I hope you'll pop over and read the second part, too. Where did you come from?

[info]lillithowl

6 years ago

[info]selene2

December 6 2005, 03:10:30 UTC 6 years ago

This is such a great start. I can't wait to read more! Fantastic job!

[info]sare_liz

December 6 2005, 21:29:15 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you very much. I appreciate your positive feedback. I hope you continue to enjoy the story as it unfolds.

[info]unperfectwolf

December 6 2005, 04:50:56 UTC 6 years ago

oooh. I liked this. And I really really wanna see the rest.

[info]sare_liz

December 6 2005, 21:29:38 UTC 6 years ago

I'm glad you're liking the fic. I hope you like the rest of it.
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