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FIC: First Kiss 1/1 (Firebolt Ring Series)

Title: First Kiss
Author: Sare Liz
Series: Firebolt Ring
Disclaimer: Belongs to JKR and associated people.

Pairing: HG/VK, Hermione’s pov.
Word Count: 4,619
Warnings: R for serious sensuality
Notes: This is fic number two in the Firebolt Ring series. Fic number one is Passing Notes. I’d like to thank my two lovely and brand new betas, Angelictears and Victoriana, as well as my best friend Rakaiagirl for their reading, commenting, and general cheerleading. My story is much better for their redaction.




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Charms practice was the excuse Hermione used to cry off hanging about between Harry and Ron today. The idea that she was working on improving her Charms wasn’t far off, in the metaphorical sense, and being the buffer between the two feuding boys was getting old – fast. Really, she needed a break.

But en route to the greenhouses, Hermione did once again wonder just how much before lunch was “before lunch.” Was he talking three minutes before lunch? An hour before lunch? Directly after breakfast? In the end, she cut the difference between the two most likely and aimed for thirty minutes. It was the easiest solution by far to the many quandaries before her, each one begging for some sort of resolution, each one seemingly far out of reach.

There was the issue of the deadly and wrongly named Tri-Wizard Tournament, with its four champions. Two of which were near and dear to her.

There was the unknown issue of Viktor’s headmaster. Apparently he was even odder than previously suspected. Just how odd would he turn out to be, and would it be a harmless sort of odd or a dangerous sort of odd?

There was the issue of Ron and Harry’s ongoing argument, which was rather infringing on her possible flirting time with Viktor. Not that flirting with Viktor was more important that her longstanding friendship with Harry, of course… but she needed to draw a line or two. And she had no idea how, or where to do so.

And of course, there was Viktor. Or rather, there were her feelings regarding Viktor. Or perhaps more appropriately (since her feelings for Viktor were pretty clear at the moment – definitely liked him, wished to find out more) there was the matter of her hormones regarding Viktor; the situation was completely out of control.

It had been wonderful on his broom, until the very end. She had been happy, abnormally relaxed for being on a racing broom, and she’d even been a little excited. But she couldn’t stop the excitement. The more time had passed, the more it felt like her nerve endings were on fire. When he finally stopped the broom back at the castle, she just… She didn’t want to get off. Hermione had in fact told herself several times to just get off the damn broom and she herself had entirely refused to do it.

It had been a completely insane situation. And it was one she wished would happen again sometime very soon.

Hermione had never in her life wished to bodily crawl into a boy’s lap, and just… nibble. The urge to perhaps nibble on some convenient body part like a neck, or a chin, or maybe an ear was quite strong whilst on that broom, however. There she had been – already in just such a lap, poised for nibbling. It was the lap of a handsome boy, a strong boy, a smart boy, a boy who was very interested in her, as a girl, being in his lap. Was it so wrong to not want to leave? She had shown admirable restraint – no nibbling occurred.

But if I don’t leave in a situation like that, what is the alternative? Fall asleep cuddling on a broomstick?

Hermione had meant the question as a rhetorical exercise, but found the obviously unacceptable answer rather appealing. The logistics of being found in the morning – or worse, in the middle of the night by Filch – were less appealing in reality, but the idea was already flying far and wide in her fantasy world where she and Viktor already had three small children and a cottage in the Pyrenees.

But reality was looming, and it took the form of the greenhouses with their plants, monstrous and benign, mostly contained within the glass walls. With the buildings beginning to fill her view and the knowledge of some of the resident flora, Hermione found it harder and harder to entertain such fantastic ideas. The very concrete world around her was suddenly coming into the focus of the present. The second greenhouse was back near the castle wall, and that was her destination. It contained not a fantasy figure from a romantic novel, but a boy with whom some tandem broom riding did occur just a few days ago.

Hermione wondered where Professor Sprout was, and whether the greenhouse was occasionally empty at this time, or reliably so. As she neared the door, she saw a figure pacing inside. Her heart clenched when she thought of him waiting in here, maybe not being sure she would come. How long had he been waiting?

Her hand on the door made the slightest amount of noise and his head jerked up. Any more than that she couldn’t see through the warped glass. He was coming toward her, though. That was clear, even before she had opened the door and stepped inside.

“Hermione,” he said in a relieved tone. She let the sound of her name roll over her. Viktor made it rich with the ‘r’ he always rolled and the vowels he made feel like dark chocolate.

“I think that maybe you don’t vant to meet me after all.”

They stood just inside the doorway. She looked up into his slightly worried eyes and fingered the strap of her book bag.

“No!” she protested. “I just… wasn’t sure, um, when to come.” Hermione realized that she wasn’t really breathing, and tried to do that once or twice. “I’m sorry,” she added.

He looked like a weight had been taken off his shoulders. “Is okay. Come, I take your bag.”

Part of Hermione rebelled at the implication that she might not be able to carry the bag she’d been hauling about for the last three years, but he was blocking the way. And she’d inadvertently made him wait and caused him stress. And he looked so… earnest.

In the end she forked over the bag without so much as a peep.

Hermione followed him on a slightly winding path through the various and innocuous-looking plant life of the greenhouse to a small bench at the back corner. Viktor put her bag down next to his, and indicated for her to sit. Hermione had a brief moment when she wondered if both of them would actually fit comfortably on the bench, but other priorities were calling to her.

“First things first,” she said, mustering the courage of her house and stepping up to him to wrap her arms around his neck. His arms immediately came around her waist and she soaked in his stunned expression even as she placed a small kiss on his cheek. Pulling back slightly, she smiled. “Congratulations on being selected. I’ve wanted to tell you for days.” His arms tightened around her.

“Thank you, Hermione,” he said, leaning down to briefly rest his forehead against hers.

“Are you still happy about the choice?” She had no intention of keeping the worried tone from her voice.

His brow furrowed slightly. “Vhy would I not be happy about such a thing?”

“It’s dangerous, Viktor. People die.”

He shook his head as he responded. “The tournament is no more dangerous than playing Quidditch. Different skills, yes, but I am ready, and there is time to prepare before each trial.”

She was unconvinced; Hermione had very little doubt that it showed in her face.

Viktor squeezed her gently, his tone coaxing. “Hermione,” he drawled softly between them. “Von’t you be happy for me? Or, at least proud of me?”

Her heart softened immediately. “I am proud of you, Viktor.” She gazed up into his eyes and was momentarily content just to dwell in the darkness of them. “I am,” she confirmed. “You were the best choice of all the proud sons of Durmstrang,” she said with certain emphasis.

“There’s quite a lot going on in here,” she said, sliding one arm from around his neck and softly rubbing his temple with her thumb, “And in here,” she continued, putting her palm over his chest, resting it on the brown wool of his uniform. “I can’t wait to find out what you’re like – other than…” Her eyes darted away, “Utterly charming and interested in me.”

Viktor sighed in what seemed like a very contented way, and took her hand that rested over his heart into one of his warm ones. Catching her attention with her hand, he raised her open palm to his lips and placed a small lingering kiss there.

It was possible that Hermione was not actually breathing in that moment. She wasn’t entirely sure. She was flashing back to her intense desire to nibble. It was a sort of all encompassing feeling that seemed to be focused in her belly, her heart, and her kissed right palm.

A moment later he took her hand and stepped back.

“Ve have much to discuss, you and I. Let us sit and begin.”

Hermione looked over at the smallish bench that was obviously their destination. “How are we…” she trailed off. Viktor sat down, but he sat on one end, straddling the bench, like he might a broom. She would have plenty of room, provided she didn’t have any qualms about cuddling up to him.

It was a good thing she didn’t.

Because of the angle of his legs, she found herself facing slightly away from him, but leaning right up against his chest. One of his hands came around her back and was starting to gently stroke her upper arm. His other hand brushed against the pleats of her wool skirt that draped over her thigh.

“Don’t you get cold?” Hermione looked down at her skirt. She could see her knee from here.

“Sometimes,” she replied, placing her hand over his. Viktor rested the weight of his hand on her thigh, moving his thumb slightly in a tiny caress, even as her fingers explored the back of his own.

Hermione turned to look at the head that was just above her right shoulder. “But I’m not cold right now.” It was the worst time for it, but she shivered. Truth be told, she was toasty warm – the shiver had a lot more to do with Viktor’s hand on her thigh than anything else.

He just looked at her.

Finally her eyes darted away and she took a deep breath. “So what’s going on with your headmaster?”

“Karkaroff, he…” Viktor trailed off. When Hermione glanced over her shoulder to look at him, he looked significantly troubled.

“I don’t know how to say in polite vay in English.” Viktor sighed. “I don’t… trust him.”

“What do you think he might do?”

“I don’t know,” he said, and Hermione could feel him shaking his head slightly. “But he is cruel. Not vith me, I matter too much,” he said. From his tone, Hermione was beginning to understand the loathing Viktor felt for his headmaster. “And he is entranced vith Dark Arts. Too much, my parents say. I think… maybe… he could be ruthless in right situation, but that might not be. I… I do not know. I do not vish to make false accusation.” His sigh was a heavy one. “He is different, this year, even before ve came. And now that I am the school’s champion, he focus on me even more. At first I think that it gives me more room vith him, but now I think it gives me less. Do you understand vhat I try to say?”

Hermione nodded her assent and tilted her head slightly, so she could see him out of her periphery, without craning her neck painfully. “What do you suspect him of, Viktor?”

“It vas after Vorld Cup,” he said very softly, as if imparting a secret. “I did not take him seriously. I vas… angry… and distracted. I did not think about this until this veek. Karkaroff found me at finals, after you saw me in the Top Box. I vas in the medical tent, still hours to go before the attack. He varned me to leafe,” Viktor said, barely audible. “I did not listen.” With much more strength and feeling, he continued after a moment’s pause. “How could he hafe known vhat vas to occur? I… My parents say he vas Death Eater vonce. I think he is Death Eater, still.”

Hermione curled her fingers between Viktor’s and squeezed. There was a war going on inside of her, and she didn’t know what to do. On the one hand she wanted to take very seriously what Viktor was saying. He was obviously worried, and objectively speaking his worry was not unwarranted. On the other hand, this sounded really familiar. Two words came to mind, actually: Professor Snape. And he always turned out to be good in the end. Might not Karkaroff be in some sort of similar situation? But back to that first hand, if she was wrong about that, it meant that her boyfriend’s headmaster was a Death Eater. And her boyfriend had the particular attention of his headmaster… “Okay, so, worst-case scenario: What if he is a Death Eater? What does that mean for you?”

“I do not know. But I do not trust him to act in best interest of anyvone but himself.”

“He warned you, though. At the final. He warned you, even at the risk of you figuring it out.”

“That does not make me feel better, Hermione,” he said slowly and deliberately.

She turned so she could look at him full. Odd, how she could feel so safe and warm in his arms, and yet he was in such turmoil. “I know,” she said. “You’ve got good reason to worry, but there’s something else that’s going on. Even if your headmaster is a Death Eater, Professor Dumbledore is the only wizard the Dark Lord ever feared, and he’s here, too.”

She could feel his full body sigh. “That does make me feel better.”

After a moment’s hesitation, Viktor continued. “There is something else, too. Karkaroff is… I do not know the vord. Somevone who appreciates only pure-blood vizards.”

“A bigot,” Hermione supplied helpfully, and with some venom.

“Yes,” he said calmly. “Karkaroff is a bigot. He vould take no pleasure in finding out that ve are dating. Maybe he vould do nothing. But I do not trust him in this matter, either.”

Hermione sighed. “Yes, you make a good point. I’m not sure I trust him either. You think we should keep it underground, then?” Viktor gave her an uncomprehending look. “I mean, you think we should be discreet?”

“Not forever,” he responded. “But for a little vhile. At least until ve get a better understanding of vhat is going on.”

“I can agree to that. Besides, your fan club might come after me if they realized we were dating.” Hermione smirked and snorted at the same time. “It’s just as well.”

There was a small period of silence during which Hermione busied herself with tracing the lines of the back of Viktor’s hand, and attempted to ignore how nice it felt to be nestled between his legs.

“You said there were many things you wanted to discuss,” she pointed out. “What’s next?”

“You are never alone in the library anymore. I do not know vhether it is okay for me to pass notes to you.”

“Oh, that,” Hermione said, sighing and scrubbing her face with her free hand. “Yes, Harry has been around a lot. Ron is in a strop with him because Ron thinks that Harry entered his own name into the Goblet without telling Ron, which is a completely ridiculous idea. And Harry is angry right back because Ron won’t believe the obvious truth that Harry’s not idiot enough to enter his name. – Not that I think you’re an idiot for entering your name. I think you’re probably pretty prepared for what you’re going to meet. I don’t feel that way about Harry. It’s bloody insane, is what it is. – So, anyway, they’re not speaking, or being within ten feet of each other, on purpose. It’s a bit annoying, really. So Harry is avoiding the Common Room, and since there’s no quidditch this year, he’s spending a lot of time at the library.” Hermione took a breath. “Anyway, I think it would be perfectly lovely if you passed me notes. And it’s nice to know you’re there, even when we don’t get a chance to talk. But, um, what do you think?”

“Now that I know how you feel, I can tell you that I prefer to be vith you, than not be vith you. Passing notes, flying, talking in the greenhouse – vhatefer.”

Hermione looked up and over her shoulder, a tentative smile blossoming on her face. She caught her lower lip between her teeth while she gazed into his eyes.

“I really like being with you, too. That’s sort of the everyday tragic part of your headmaster and your fan club. We sort of have to be indifferent to each other in public.”

Viktor’s response was a rumbling groan of assent that gave Hermione the shivers again. “I’m not certain how indifferent I can be in public.”

Hermione’s awareness of Viktor’s body around her suddenly increased with his soft, growly response. Every point of contact seemed to prickle. His broad chest against her back and shoulders, his legs firm against her rear and thigh, his hands hot on her arm, and her thigh all seemed to be suddenly intense to the point of risqué.

Viktor rested his forehead behind her ear, and she could feel the warm air of his breath as he exhaled heavily. Then he spoke. “I’ve never felt like this. I don’t vant to hide it. I vant to tell everybody. Especially girls in the library.”

“But we probably should,” she said with a certain fatalism. “Hide it, I mean. You know, at least for now.”

In the brief silence that followed, Hermione’s stomach took the opportunity to rumble, loudly. She groaned.

“And ve probably should get to lunch, and feed you.”

“No,” she whined. “We’ve only just begun talking.” Hermione turned her head to look at him again. “I don’t want to go yet.”

His smile was small, but present. “I vas hoping you vould say that. I brought provisions.”

“You did?”

Viktor gave a little rumble of assent as he pulled away and rooted around in his bag with one hand. He pulled out a huge orange. “You like?”

She nodded, and his arms came around her once more. As he started to very carefully and methodically peel the orange, attempting to get the rind off all in one long strip, Hermione decided that now was the time to get some information out of him.

“What are your favorite things, Viktor?”

“Hmm, my Firebolt. Quidditch. My parents. Arithmancy –“

Arithmancy?” Hermione asked, rather shocked.

“Yes, Arithmancy,” he said in a tone that brooked no challenge. “Arithmancy and Charms, actually. I like to know vhy things vork, and make my own. I like Transfiguration, too, but not as much as Charms. And music. My mother plays the cello, and I grew up listening.”

“Do you play?” she asked, even as she accepted the long strand of peel so he could section off the orange.

“A little. But never at school. Just growing up, and on holiday now.”

“What instrument do you play?”

“My mother’s cello. Here,” he said, handing her a slice, and taking one for himself.

They ate in silence for a bit, and when the orange was finished, he took the peel from her and pushed it into a pocket of his bag.

“I love oranges, but my hands are always so sticky afterwards…”

“Here,” he said, holding his hands out in front of Hermione, inviting her to put her hands in his. She did, and was slightly surprised when his hands encompassed hers, and he said, “Evanesco.

Her hands were clean.

“You know wandless magic?” she asked in disbelief.

“Not for all magic, but for a few charms, yes.”

“That’s brilliant,” Hermione breathed, entirely impressed.

“And useful,” Viktor pointed out practically. “For life, for house. Charm to clean, to repair, to summon, to provide light. For these, my mother thinks, no vand should be necessary. Should be like breathing.”

“So your mum taught you wandless magic?”

“And to play cello. Both, like breathing, for her.”

“Wow. What’s it like, growing up with wizards for parents?”

Viktor shrugged. They now held hands, both sets resting in her lap. “Apparently different from growing up vith Muggles as parents.”

“Tell me something, then, about your childhood.”

Viktor collected his thoughts for a moment, and then told her about his first toy broomstick that he got for his fourth birthday. Hermione listened in rapt attention as he spun out the story in his slow, melodic way, letting not only the words and their meanings, but also their very sounds wash over her. It was like being lulled – not into sleep, but deeper and deeper into the forest by a will o’ the wisp.

That awareness was coming on her again, creeping like a fine mist over the glen. She shifted slightly in hopes that the awareness might slough off, but to no avail. The sensation only got more intense, as Viktor unconsciously shifted around her, even as he told his story. Hermione could feel the muscles in his thighs clench and release as his body moved ever so slightly around hers.

In the pause of a thought forming, Hermione heard the soft chime of Viktor’s watch. Could the time have possibly passed so quickly?

“Lunch is over,” Viktor sang out softly.

Hermione shifted in his embrace, turning toward him as much as she could – which wasn’t much – putting her hands on his shoulders, letting her forearms drape down his chest. She looked into his eyes and smiled a little smile before getting lost in his own dark eyes.

“I’m really glad you asked me here, Viktor,” she whispered. The moment seemed so close, so intimate that a normal voice seemed like too much, too big for the small space between them.

“I’m glad you came,” he responded in a similar tone, which seemed almost reverent. As she had turned, his arms encircled her waist, but just now his left hand came up and pushed a stray lock of her hair back, tracing down the side of her face as he went. As Viktor’s thumb reached her chin, it floated gently back up to the center of her bottom lip, and slowly traced her now parted and gasping lips.

Her breath came out in a shudder, and she watched as his eyes seemed to glaze over. She watched him watch her breathe, and Hermione hadn’t ever in her life seen anything sexier. She could see his chest rising and falling now, visibly and rapidly. He met her gaze, and his thumb found its rest at the corner of her mouth. He licked his lips and it looked like he wanted to say something, but he also looked as glazed as Hermione felt.

“May I kiss you, Hermione?” he whispered, staring into her eyes.

“Yes,” she breathed out. “Please –“ but his lips were already there. A soft, cool, tentative pressure against hers, and then he was gone.

Hermione leaned forward and tilted her head slightly, and the soft, cool pressure was back, and she could feel it from the base of her spine to the top of her neck. It made her gasp a little, and when she opened her mouth, so did Viktor. And then an entirely new world opened as well.

Oranges. And Viktor. And heat. The heat started with his breath in their open mouthed kiss and quickly spread to her entire body. Her arms came more fully around his neck with a mind completely of their own. The leg of his that rested against her own shifted down and Viktor gently swept Hermione closer, sliding her legs over and on top of his lowered one.

His hand stayed half way up her bare thigh, supporting her position half on his lap. Where her wool skirt might otherwise be keeping her warm, his hand burned into her skin. It made her breath catch in the midst of her kiss, and made her arms tighten around his neck.

Her world spun on its axis around her in the most dizzying fashion when she felt his gently questing tongue against her lips. She moaned, and her breath came in much smaller pants as her tongue touched his. Slick and strong, her tongue slid against and around his.

Oranges, and Viktor, and heat.

She felt squirmy, and pressed herself into his chest. As his tongue met and met hers again, darting forth and then retreating back, she followed him in the dance, never quite being able to get enough of him. Her entire body was on fire, and it was all pouring out in her lips pressing against his, her tongue tangling with his, her arms around him, her fingers rubbing at the scruff of his so very short hair. It wasn’t enough. She didn’t know what would be enough, but she broke off their kiss and drew in a shaky breath.

Her head fell back with a little moan, her chest heaving, and she just shook for a moment in his arms.

Viktor did not stop kissing her. When her chin tipped up, his lips left a gentle, hot trail down her neck to her collar, and then back up again.

“So beautiful,” he murmured near her ear, just before he kissed it.

“Viktor,” she sighed, holding him close to her, thoroughly enjoying his physicality.

“You have class, I’m thinking,” he rumbled in her ear, even as his hand massaged the outside of her thigh.

Hermione licked her lips and tried to engage her brain.

“Class? Yes, class. I should, um…” Instead of getting up, Hermione collapsed quite happily in his arms, her head on his shoulder.

“Wow,” she breathed. “I didn’t know a kiss could be like that.”

“Me either,” he said, nuzzling into her neck. “But I hoped,” he added, and Hermione didn’t need to see his grin to know it was there.

She giggled. “We’re going to have to discuss that sometime, Viktor.” Her energy was coming back to her, and with it a sort of playfulness she didn’t realize she had. She gave him a tiny kiss at the sharp corner of his jaw and pulled back.

“I do have class,” she said, staring boldly into his eyes for the first time.

Viktor released his hold on her legs, and pulled her skirt back down to a reasonable level. She had no idea it had been so high, but couldn’t really bring herself to be overly bothered by the new information.

“Vould you go flying vith me again? Next veek? Thursday or Friday, same time?”

He got up with her and handed her the bag she’d brought, settling it gently on her shoulders before reaching down and taking up his own.

She nodded. “Thursday? By the pumpkins?”

“No. Beauxbaton carriage is there, now. I’ll pick you up at the castle door.”

They made their winding way to the door of the greenhouse. Hermione grinned and tossed a glance back at him. “This isn’t an excuse to avoid me until Thursday, you know.”

Viktor made a little disgruntled noise. “Just try to keep me avay, and see how successful you are.”

As her hand touched the door handle, his had touched hers. She paused and looked back at him. Viktor brought her hand up to his lips as he bent over it slightly.

Oranges, Viktor, and heat – she could still taste him.

Tags: firebolt ring, hg/vk, romance

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[info]dancinggoldfish

December 16 2005, 01:54:01 UTC 6 years ago

De dum. Wow. Um, completely indescribable. The connection between these two - and the comfortableness, yet slight awkwardness - is so absolutely obvious and endearing. And then that kiss at the end! *swoons* You have reduced me to a gibbering mass of non-intelligible words ;p

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 02:30:04 UTC 6 years ago

::grins:: I'm glad you liked it.

I've really been enjoying playing around with the physicality of it all.(okay'd by Viktor as he sits in my chair, nodding and saying, "Yes, just so.") I mean, their first date was very, very physical. If you could even call it a first date, which I occasionally do and occasionally don't.

But I'm entranced with the concept of relationship based on self-disclosure. That self-disclosure isn't just verbal, it's everything, the entire self with increasing levels of intimacy. And self-disclosure doesn't just an evevnt that happens at the beginning of the relationship, but it is in fact, the relationship. Self-disclosure as an ontological state of being.

It helps that Viktor challenges Hermione daily with his comfortability in his own skin - yet another way in which my Viktor may very well be OOC.

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[info]ser523

December 16 2005, 02:12:26 UTC 6 years ago

gnurgh. That was amazing. *is also a puddle of goo*

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 02:32:28 UTC 6 years ago

::huge grin:: Thanks for reviewing, even though you're currently a puddle of goo. I appreciate it immensely.

::happy sare, swaying to Magic Works::

[info]xenokattz

December 16 2005, 02:37:20 UTC 6 years ago

I've been squeeing since the "nibbling" paragraph. I don't think I can stop.

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 02:55:39 UTC 6 years ago

::giggles madly:: I love Hermione and her occationally irrational urges. She's great.

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[info]ladysaille

December 16 2005, 02:48:51 UTC 6 years ago

Oh my goodness, that was incredible. I figured it would be, you have them down so well, but that was just, wow. Okay now that I am done being incoherent. I must say that captured them so perfectly. It captured Hermione's feelings wonderfully, and Viktor as well. I love how new you make it for both of them.

They seem so well suited for each other, I can't wait for more. I can't wait to see how things progress. I know you'd mentioned it was a long story, and I have no doubt it will be more than worth the wait.

You've created such believable chemistry between them, and you've created something strong than simply passion, they seem to actually have something more to build on.

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 03:15:32 UTC 6 years ago

::smiles winningly:: I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Glad too, that I've lived up to expectations. This is good.

::nods:: They really do seem well suited for each other. That's the tragedy, of course. However well suited, they can't just get married when he graduates, as might be expected in the wizarding world. He'll need to wait, and wait, and wait... ::sigh:: It'll work out in the end, but there'll be angst at some point. It's inevitable. The good news is there won't be much angst. Not overdramatic angst, anyway. Just the sort of every day angst of circumstances out of your control. So... yea. Long story.

Believable chemistry. This is good. While not one of my stated goals, certianly something that I'd tacitly hoped for. As for 'stronger than simply passion', that was definitly a goal. I mean, Viktor is reverently obsessed with her, and it's not just teenage lust. He wants to know who she is on a basic level. And for her part, I think that Hermione is entranced to find a handsome, smart, interesting (also, foreign thus exotic) boy who is romantically interested in her, and is completely willing to play that out until such point as it proves not worth her while in some way. And she's finding out that is not only worth her while, but really, really, really worth her while. Worth her while, plus some.

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[info]bunney

December 16 2005, 03:16:52 UTC 6 years ago

Oh my goodness. I think I'd forgotten just how sensual a mere kiss could be. You have a truly remarkable way of putting words together and making Viktor a beautiful, melancholy figure. I just wanted to snuggle him.

But, my favorite thing about it is Hermione and her sexual awakening. You're really handling it deftly and making it realistic for her age. Great, wonderful story, sweetie!

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 03:38:56 UTC 6 years ago

::rather impressive grin:: Thank you for the lovely set of compliments. I'm glad you liked it.

Hm. Viktor, melancholy. I'm going to have to think about that. (But yes, I'd like to snuggle him too. But that's Hermione's job.)

[info]kansassatin

December 16 2005, 03:23:10 UTC 6 years ago

What a perfect kiss. *sighs dreamily*


Fantastic piece by the way...I'm just in love with their kiss...*smiles dreamily*

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 03:40:17 UTC 6 years ago

::grin:: I'm glad you liked it. Thank you very much for reviewing. I hope you'll enjoy the next bits as much as this one.

[info]selene2

December 16 2005, 03:32:07 UTC 6 years ago

This is amazing! Great work! Thank you!

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 03:42:14 UTC 6 years ago

You're welcome! I'm glad you liked it.

I have to say, I feel like taking Viktor out for some celebratory Thai food, or possibly to Hard Times to go get some truly amazing chili, just to say thank you. I think if he were real, I'd have to.

[info]supergirl69187

December 16 2005, 04:56:47 UTC 6 years ago

oh wow! im seriously breathless. wow. gah, that was so hot! i want a viktor so bad now, it isnt even funny. you made him so incerdibly irresistable. i CAN NOT wait for more of this story! you so rock!

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 12:29:31 UTC 6 years ago

::huge grin:: Thank you. I'm so glad you liked it.

::sigh:: He really is irresisitble. It's almost enough to make you wrap a Bulgaria scarf around your waist and hope he'll notice you... (::getting glares from the Bulgarian in her arm chair:: "Just joking, Viktor. I'd never actually do it...")

[info]mslessa

December 16 2005, 05:25:34 UTC 6 years ago

*woof* I find myself suddenly in need of a tall glass of something liquid to cure my cottonmouth and to cool myself down.

That was just perfect. It reminded me of all things that go with a first kiss, the awareness, the *squirmy* feeling your insides twisting gives you, the never wanting it to end. Yet it wasn't obscene or crass, it was tastefully done perfectly in keeping with her age and experience level. Viktor, himself, was just charming. He was courtly but manly if that makes much sense. Don't think I didn't notice how pleased with himself he was that he made Hermione have that kind of reaction.

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 12:46:11 UTC 6 years ago

::grin:: I'm glad it met expectations.

Interesting that you mention gender roles, as I've been mucking about with them, in the traditionally Platonic sense. (Er, platonic, as in Plato, not friendship.) The ancient Greek ideal that has been wholeheartedly embraced by Western culture is that Male= Intellect/Intelligence, Wisdom Spirit, Holiness, Innate Goodness, Higher Human Functioning, the Original. Female= Body/Physical, Sexual, Sensual, Earthy, Innate Sinfulness/Brokenness, Lower Animal Functioning, the Secondary.

But since I think Plato came to some radically wrong conclusions, particularly when he started talking about gender roles, I'm loving this story. I get to explore what happens when a Man who is physical, sensual, etc (but who, for all of that, isn't unintellegent, etc.) is the one persuing the Woman who is Spirit/Intelect/Wisdom, etc.

[info]dora_mcallister

December 16 2005, 07:28:12 UTC 6 years ago

Oh, steamy. I love this. And you should know, this is the only fic I'm currently following. You've hooked me, well done. You make me want to write fan fic again.

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 12:51:00 UTC 6 years ago

Write again! Write again! (I mean, look at me. This is me writing again. I haven't seriously written in a few years. This might be a generalizable phenomenon.)

I'm really glad you like the fic, though. And as for this ship... It's not like we're swimming in fic, here. ::sigh:: That's what made me open Word, really. I mean, I was in SS/HG for ages and barely wrote anything, mostly because I didn't have to, and I wasn't really locked into a community where I was encouraged. Wasn't for lack of inspiration.

But here... There are some lovely writers, but there ain't much fic.

::sigh::

So, write. Write whatever inspires you.

::hugs::

Anonymous

December 16 2005, 11:57:54 UTC 6 years ago

For some reason I can't log in!! Well, anyway...you've made my day! I was having a shitty morning at work and this kiss has just lightned it! You've absolutely fulfilled all my expectations!. Please, dear friend, ensure me that this is not going the last thing I read from you about this wonderful and uber-cute couple ^^. Are we having them flying again? Are we having them in the ball? Oh, so many questions! :P

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 12:56:27 UTC 6 years ago

::grins:: Wish I knew who you were. Next time you can't log in, a least sign your name, darling.

I'm glad this made your day better. That is the shinning and happy bonus for all good fic, I think. And fear not, there's more. They're going flying on Thursday, silly! We'll see that, somehow. And it's only the second week in November. We've got a little bit to go before the Yule Ball.

Though... I'm tempted to write a little Merry Christmas snippet as a present for my flist. The question is, will I be able to do it and everything else I need to do before Christmas and St. Stephen's Day in the next nine days?

[info]thimble_kiss

December 16 2005, 16:20:34 UTC 6 years ago

Mmm, how sweet. I love your Viktor -- somber and intensely emotional, but with a sly sense of humor breaking through. :) This is credible as a stage of romance for a 15- and 17-year-old, but it's also very clear that Hermione is a smart fifteen and Viktor has a sense of responsibility beyond his years. I actually love that about him and the glimpses you give into the background that may have shaped him so.

I seem to have stumbled into the middle of this, so now I must go and look up the first part. *g*

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 19:44:47 UTC 6 years ago

I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and Viktor as well.

Also, I'm gratified to hear that you think the plot/characterizations are appropriate. I worry about that one. And as for his background, I figure there is a reason he is the way he is, and it strikes me that he might be still very close to his parents - because he's clearly not close with his headmaster, his fans, or visibly any other of his classmates from Durmstrang that came to Hogwarts.

It makes me think of youngish celebrities and the varied ways that they react to fame. For Viktor, my sense is that he realized early on that people care less about him than his status, and that if he allows it, he will be used to within an inch of his life. He's 17, yes, but he's already gotten a chance to look behind the facade, and he's actively seeking something deeper, something balanced.

[info]thimbles

December 16 2005, 16:20:50 UTC 6 years ago

Your characterizations of Viktor and Hermione are positively charming. I love how they seem so comfortable yet a little awkward, very cute. The way you write them is perfect and I will be very much looking forward to reading more of your work.

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 19:46:34 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you so much. I appreciate the feedback. I'm glad that you're enjoying the characterizations.

I haven't started on the next one yet, but I'm expecting to do so in the next couple of days. I have academic goals that must be reached today, but then after that I'm as free as a bird to talk with Viktor and see what has happened to him and Hermione lately.

[info]elisa0984

December 16 2005, 16:43:59 UTC 6 years ago

I was not expecting to see this so soon, it was such a surprise.

I like the relationship you've established between Karkaroff and Viktor. To the outside observer, Karkaroff is offputting and I like seeing the relationship from Viktor's perspective.

Hermione and Viktor are charming and work so well together. I loved the kiss, it gave poor Viktor a moment but it was still a mutual pounce. Lovely job.

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 19:56:23 UTC 6 years ago

::grins:: Surprise! Other apsects of life to infringe on my writing time (like academia, and my ordination), it's true, but my muse is present, available, and sitting in that comfortable chair right over there... Who am I to not write?

Viktor is very, very wary of Karkaroff. Wary to the point that he is afraid to show his wariness. I've read a bunch of different fic that posit a bunch of different nasty things that Karkaroff could do to Viktor, and I've been influenced by them. Viktor is worried that he might be used as some sort of twisted bargaining chip to Voldemort. He's worried that Karkaroff is going to force him into a situation where Viktor will become a Death Eater against his will. He's worried that he'll be put into a situation where if he refuses to do what Karkaroff wants, he'll be seriously injured, his memory will be swiss-cheesed, or he'll be killed outright. He's worried that Karkaroff is not above the Imperius, adn Viktor knows he can't throw off a strong one. (Viktor tells me that he's practiced with friends at Durmstrang - putting each other under Imperio just for practice at breaking it. Viktor himself can do a pretty strong Imperio, but he can only throw off a weak one, and he's never been able to throw off Karkaroff's. ...I just asked Viktor if they had them practice the Cruciatus, and he paled. "You hafe to vant to cause horrible pain to someone, for it to vork. I could never make the curse vork... at Durmstrang.")

Need to go give my muse a hug and a kiss now, and apologize for being callous.

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[info]dreamerdust

December 16 2005, 19:49:00 UTC 6 years ago

Oh wow. Sorry, I know it's not very descriptive, but wow :D

[info]sare_liz

December 16 2005, 19:58:11 UTC 6 years ago

::grins:: I'm really glad you liked it. Thank you for reviewing.

Anonymous

December 16 2005, 23:55:32 UTC 6 years ago

fantastik

omg!i dont no wat 2 say!that was fantastick! i was on the edge of mi seat all the way through were's the rest of the story!

[info]sare_liz

December 17 2005, 00:03:48 UTC 6 years ago

Re: fantastik

I'm glad you liked it.

The rest of the story? Patience, my friend. Patience. The rest of the story is both in my head, and in Viktor's head. He's right over there. No, to your left. Yea, in the chair. Wave to Viktor.

Anonymous

December 17 2005, 01:22:35 UTC 6 years ago

Hope you don't mind another anony-mouse creeping through your LJ... :)

I absolutely love this series – I think I amused my neighbors greatly last night with my bizarre yelp-squee when I saw you'd added another chapter. Your timing was great, though – it provided some desperately needed distraction from my thrice-cursed accounting final. Absolutely beautiful imagery. You've taken me from wondering if they'll end up together to believing that they *have* to. (Plus, I'm rather in awe of Hermione's restraint when in the presence of so nibble-worthy a lad.) More, pretty please?

You've made me bitterly regret that there isn't more mention of Viktor and V/H in the books. At least the lack of background provides a certain amount of freedom when it comes to fic! For what it's worth (coming from someone who's only read the online Viktor-related bits of GoF as yet, so YMMV), I don't think the idea of Viktor being 'comfortable in his own skin' is necessarily OOC. We just often have the misfortune in the book/movie of seeing him in rather high-pressure or creepifying situations – an overly-attentive Death Eater for a headmaster and a pack of slavering fans with annoyingly accurate tracking abilities would make anyone feel ready to jump out of their skin. Shame he can't lay hands on an invisibility cloak...

One question: Viktor said that "I could never make the curse vork... at Durmstrang." Interesting pause there. Not that I want to upset him by asking – but I don't suppose he's mentioned what fool made him so furious that he was able to make it work?

~ Dana

[info]sare_liz

December 17 2005, 03:00:47 UTC 6 years ago

Yay! Anonymous posters who leave their name! Yay! ::huggles Dana::

I'm so glad that this fic has proved procrastination for more than just my own finals. This is a lovely bit of solidarity I'm garnering here.

And thank you for your wonderful compliments. I personally have lived too long in the 'they probably won't end up together' camp, and I'm just sick of it. Who knows what book seven brings, but I am content. Viktor is a wonderful character and I'm just going to write my little heart out for as long as he keeps on talking. And really, he's entirely nibble-worthy. Aw, and now he's blushing. You are, dear. You're entirely nibble-worthy, and just think, it's Hermione who wants to nibble on you! (He's perking up.)

From the book/Harry's POV, I do get the sense that Viktor being comfortable in his own skin is OOC, though. Harry's observations repeatedly portray him as someone who is amazingly graceful on broomstick and rather cumbersome, though slight of build, on the ground. Duckfooted and roundshouldered. Well, hell, that's most of the American population. Welcome to the age of terrible posture. Just makes me want to sit up straight in my desk chair with my shoulder blades back for the hell of it. ...Oh wait, I can't reach the keyboard this way...

But you make a good point. In addition to the entire book being from Harry's POV, we do see him in some very specific situations: being uncomfortable with Karkaroff's fawning, being uncomfortable with the fangirls fawning, being uncomfortable at Champion gatherings, and sitting in the library, staring at Hermione. The one time we see him in his own element in any sense is in the beginning of the book, on a broom. And then he's brilliant, a genius, a master, the best in the world. Makes you think.

And about your question, we don't even have to ask Viktor. I know the answer to that. JKR says in the book that Crouch took out Fleur and cast the Imperius Curse on Viktor so Viktor would take out Cedric. In the movie, you see the tell-tale green of the Killing Curse, though you hear no words. In the book, you hear Viktor casting the Cruciatus Curse. Because of the nature of Imperio, Viktor felt the very keen want to torture Cedric, even though the want didn't originate with him. It felt real. And it left it's mark on Viktor just as certianly as it left a mark on Cedric, before Voldemort finished him off. And Cedric was one of the few who was polite to Viktor, despite who and what Viktor was affiliated with. Viktor liked Cedric. And so we dive to even greater depths of angst...

It's okay. He's in therapy.

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[info]syrenfyre

December 17 2005, 03:43:21 UTC 6 years ago

Oh my...I love it...it's just..*is speechless*

[info]sare_liz

December 17 2005, 03:45:09 UTC 6 years ago

Thanks. I'm glad you've enjoyed it. I hope you'll continue to do so. ::grin::

[info]beauty_is_self

December 17 2005, 06:39:59 UTC 6 years ago

awwww... I've been waiting for this for so long!!! I'm happy that it's here!! Seriously, it has made this long, horrible week much better!!! (Think I like exclamation marks tonight?) Anyway, due to the long and horrid week, I cannot think of anything even close to brilliant to say... Hermione's realization of her own sexuality, and the progression of that, is wonderful, very true to real life. And I swear, I really do love Viktor more and more every time you write. He's so aware and considerate of her, while still being a normal 17 year old boy. I <3 it. Cannot wait for more (Viktor, that is).

[info]sare_liz

December 17 2005, 15:10:12 UTC 6 years ago

::grins:: I'm so glad you liked it, and glad that it helped.

Glad you think that the progression of character development is on track. That's good. There are moments when it's very odd, writing this - I mean, I didn't get my first kiss at fifteen, from an athletic superstar I've found to be human. Neither have I ever been a 17 year old boy, but I did know a few that were aware, considerate, and very wonderful guys. They didn't usually have girlfriends, as they were usually as ungainly on the ground as we're told Viktor is, but the few who did treated their girlfriends like the treasures they found them to be.

I really think that Viktor has an awareness of the other that belies the hallmark of the teenage years, which I would hazard a guess at being self-centeredness. There's no pain like my pain, my drama is all-consuming. That sort of thing. I know I certianly thought it was true. And in a sense, it is completely: when you're the center of your universe, your drama really is all consuming. For me, I came out of it much slower than Viktor. I commend him for that. ::shrugs:: But one day, you wake up and realize that the people of Malawi are starving to death, and your perspective suddenly shifts. ::shrugs again:: Or something. Mutatis mutandis.

/end sermon.

[info]shortshape2002

December 17 2005, 07:04:36 UTC 6 years ago

Um...Gobbleygook is the equivlent of my brain at the moment. I loved it... The desire, akwardness, hesitation... It's all REAL if you get what I mean?

Brit

[info]sare_liz

December 17 2005, 15:19:32 UTC 6 years ago

::grin:: I'm glad you liked it.

Funny you should mention real. Viktor and I were just sniggering over how pretty and neat we all want being in love to be. And it's not. It's complex, and full of misunderstandings. It's a process that occasionally runs so smooth you think, "Yes! Exactly! That's what I'm talking about!" and so rocky at other times you think, "Who is this giant asshole I wake up to?"

::grin:: We were talking too, about sex. Whenever it is that they end up having sex (and I'm so not telling), it's going to be messy as hell, because really good sex always is. But that's not always a favorite view of fic writers...

[info]arukita

December 19 2005, 14:24:11 UTC 6 years ago

With each new part I like this even more if posible.
It was just lovely.

[info]sare_liz

December 19 2005, 16:07:25 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad that you're still enjoying the story, and I hope you'll like the rest. ::smiles::

Thanks for reviewing.

[info]ladykes

January 2 2006, 05:24:50 UTC 6 years ago

Can't believe I didn't review this fantastic story! Well, I'm correcting that now.

The descriptions are just perfect. From the "squirmy" feeling to the kiss to even the description of her wool skirt. You have a knack for painting word-pictures. Thank you. :)

[info]elliesmeow

October 14 2008, 05:41:31 UTC 3 years ago

Whew! That was a hot kiss. Too bad we never got to see that in the movie!*sulks*

Thanks for filling in the blank.;)

-Ellie

[info]maddie50

March 11 2009, 03:04:40 UTC 3 years ago

There is major chemistry going on. I love how formal and romantic he is. And he is always so respectful.
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